New film. need opinions. please.

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

ok someone give me their opinion (please keep an open mind) on a short (roughly 30 min) film about a series of illegal underground shoppingcart races. itll be basically about a group of people who stumble upon this and attempt to become a part of it but face a bunch of challenges (involving canadians, strippers, etc.) to become the worlds best shopping cart racing team. their mortal enemies are the icelandian(ic) because i really don't know anyone from iceland and its iceland. theyre also on the run from the cops. glmclaim, i know you will say this sucks. i just know. so im ignoring you. any one else though feel free to post an opinion. please :D

[WesScog]

That sounds pretty funny, so it's basically Fast and the Furious but with shopping Carts?

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

didn't even think of that. Im gonna add a slow motion drift scene just to make it feel more like that

thanks wes your opinion means a lot
and hell who wouldnt want to see a bunch of shopping carts with people wearing leather suits and helmets go flying down a hill

[ThreeOnAMeathook]

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I'll watch it.

[DeviousTom]

Well you will have to add the slow motion shopping cart drifting for sure! Where will you film this by the way and where will you get shopping carts

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

Where will you film this by the way and where will you get shopping carts

as for the shopping carts, i know people. and as to where this will be filmed, there are a lot of places near me that im gonna try to use. i live in an area filled with hills so ive got no shortage in downhill race track

[17thletterfilms]

XD Sounds crazy!

[mixed up zombie]

:D sounds awsome

[Dingo-John]

Downhill race track = incredibly bad idea... some years ago i tried it (just for the fun).. think I was 10... my guess would be that the "hill" was about a 15 degrees downwards... I think i managed to stay in the shopping cart for about 15 seconds after the other guys had pushed me... that was pure luck... the cart then began to turn so i was rolling sideways, and then BAAM... two seconds later I were lying on the ground and seriously bleeding from my elbow, both knees and both hands... plus, the cart landed on top of me, so i hurt my head and back... of course I was driving on a little gravel road, so maybe it wasnt a good idea, but at least the gravel makes sure you dont get far, and that you dont go that fast... if I had been doing it asphalt, I probably wouldnt have been able to tell this... just be carefull... really not funny when you fall (but untill then, its a really great feeling... adrenalin, testosteron and whatever...)

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

yes cause as you know i was really planning on pushing my actors down steep hills. im setting up a rig so the cart can safley go down the hill and stay standing

[Brainstrained]

Pretty cool idea, how much of it have you written so far?

[dahlroth!]

sounds pretty funny, i would watch it

[trspballer7]

instead of actualy doing the still dangerous cart and hill technique, I would sugest greenscreening the whole thing. Just set it up so the cart is leaning forwards, and then your actors can get in. Then film it. Then film going down the hill and voila. This is basically how they filmed most of the rollercoaster scenes at the begining of Finaldestination 3....which sucks

[CreepyClownpro]

Sounds real good and original

I'd watch it!:D

[rrh]

Shopping carts are shiny and have a whole bunch of tiny holes in them. That would be a huge pain to green screen.

Stick dummies in the carts wearing the same clothes for long shots, and use real people for close ups, but have someone off camera holding the cart to keep it under control.

You can also shoot on a flat street and pull it by a rope. Then speed up the footage.

[CreepyClownpro]

Shopping carts are shiny and have a whole bunch of tiny holes in them. That would be a huge pain to green screen.

Stick dummies in the carts wearing the same clothes for long shots, and use real people for close ups, but have someone off camera holding the cart to keep it under control.

You can also shoot on a flat street and pull it by a rope. Then speed up the footage.

Yeah i didn't read you wanted to do it on green screen. Yeah try pulling them like he said.

[Dream_Academy]

yes cause as you know i was really planning on pushing my actors down steep hills. im setting up a rig so the cart can safley go down the hill and stay standing

Wait, actors aren't disposable resources?

[Dingo-John]

yes cause as you know i was really planning on pushing my actors down steep hills. im setting up a rig so the cart can safley go down the hill and stay standing


good... shopping carts should be taken very seriously ;)

but its a good idea to just have a plain road and then pull the carts with a rope... maybe tilt the camera, just a bit, and then speeding up the footage...

New Year is over... "ræk mig soyaen din gule djævel" (Anders Matthesen)

[extramontana]

An idea...

What about bobsled style shopping cart racing. You know, team pushing it up to speed and then the (challenging) jumping into it-Oh, and leave a guy on the back dragging a foot to correct the cart when in begins to veer.
Practically, this is what I do when I race my groceries back to the car and I start to swerve...

Love the idea btw

[007brett]

Wow this is going to be a great film! Its so original!

[mrsnowman]

MAN!!!!!!!!!!!

This could very well be the single most greatest idea ever!!!
I really wish I could be a part of the production....

or I could just steal your idea.... ...no, no thats preposterous.....

This seems like the kinda movie will farrell would be in, he would be the hotshot rival of the newcomers.


AWESOME IDEA!!!!!!!!

[mrsnowman]

However, this could easily be ruined by bad humor and poor acting

otherwise NICE....

[mixed up zombie]

i was making a film about vaccum racing darnit

[Flamingo With A Spoon Productions]

There needs to be an extreme Russian guy who wins every race because the shopping cart rides him!

You also need dramatic shots where people fall off and a scene with a guy with a grid pattern on his ass.

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

No one here will believe me but i came up with this idea after eating way too much skittles on halloween. we would have followed through with it but we all thought it was a dumb idea until we really started to think about it. you all are3 gonna be all "no yourmindsinerworkings idea" im working with him. im writing it now

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

No one here will believe me but i came up with this idea after eating way too much skittles on halloween. we would have followed through with it but we all thought it was a dumb idea until we really started to think about it. you all are3 gonna be all "no yourmindsinerworkings idea" im working with him. im writing it now

yes its true. This kid above is co-writing it. Now i really cant wait to get it underway. assuming the script is finished sometime in the near future (and i can fix this kink in my after effects) this should be hopefully done by June (hopefully)(no promises) and i also wont spam the living crap out of it like those guys that made that portal series.

wish us luck.

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

However, this could easily be ruined by bad humor and poor acting

otherwise NICE....

comedy is NOT my strong suit (thats why im CO writing) and as for the acting; well i know some people.

[mrsnowman]

and as for the acting; well i know some people.

like will farrell?!!?!!?!!:fcross:

[ericslovechild]

"Illegal underground shoppingcart races" reminds me of "Illegal underground table tennis" in Balls of Fury (piece of crap)

But as for my idea, I think that it could be believable if it takes place during the great depression.

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

well take the underground theme from balls of fury (minus the shitty story) plus beerfest plus a little bit of shake and a little bit of bake (sorry Mrs Snowman but Wills busy working on some personal project so i couldnt get him in on this) and there you have it.

[amc760]

cool runnings meets jackass

[Flamingo With A Spoon Productions]

HAHAHAHA! The egg!

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

we take turns writing the script, i write mine, he writes his, i butcher his and make it better and then i write mine and it all repeats

[SteveNelson'sEvilTwin]

I immediately thought of Cool Runnings when I read the idea. Sounds pretty good, but could easily fall into the realm of the unfunny through one-liners and bad acting.

[clabb]

it could also be really funny if done as a documentary.

[Flamingo With A Spoon Productions]

That's a great idea! Documentary style would be awesome :D.

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

NOOOOOOOO documentary
with my available persons (the ones i keep locked in my basement) i dont think thatd work

[Flamingo With A Spoon Productions]

Mockumentarys are incredibly easy to make.

[17thletterfilms]

Well I hope that this isn't ruined by bad humor (like Balls of Fury) 'cuz it's a really great idea.

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

NOOOOOOOO documentary
with my available persons (the ones i keep locked in my basement) i dont think thatd work

for all those who believe this to be cruel, it is actually a really nice basement. little does he know that the backdoor is unlocked and i steal from his liqur cabnit. (he likes to think that im trapt)

but really though, a documentery whould be bad. an e true hollywood story of it might be good if it gets popular enough but no documentery

and i would also like to add that this movie will be mostly one liners and when i say that i mean A LOT of one liners. but thanks to being influenced by arrested developement i have learned to write comedies with many jokes that comeback later on

[Flamingo With A Spoon Productions]

Be careful one liners can be really bad.

If you hate mockumentary's so much you've obviously never seen This Is Spinal Tap or Best In Show.

Please don't ruin your great idea.

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

you obviously dont know my one liners

Spinal tap kicked ass by the way

[Flamingo With A Spoon Productions]

Give me a few examples then I'm intriged.

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

STONER 3

If ya wanta get down ya betta... stick o'round...

STONER 1 and Stoner 2

...Cocaine... (mumbled)

JOE

ok... so anyway, what are you guys doing here?

STONER 2

We can't tell you.

ROB

If you tell us, I'll give you a lighter.

STONER 1

...Give us time to think this over.

The two stoners walk about 10 feet away to think about the offer. The third stays passed out.

STONER 1

I think we should do it.

STONER 2

No way, we can't, its against the code. They'll kill us if they find out we told them.

STONER 1

Think about it for a minute, we just lost two team mates against the Japanese, that retard over there may need to go to the hospital.


By now the stoner lying down is screaming a song which he and Michael are singing a duet to.

STONER 3 and Michael

Babe, i got you babe...

STONER 1

Scratch that we have to take him to the hospital now. No matter how baked you get, you NEVER sing Sher.

STONER 2

So we tell them, but what happens to us?

STONER 1

We tell them, give them the cart and we'll drop out. Besides we need a new lighter.

<please keep in mind that im trying to give u something good with out giving up much, so this is earlier on into the script

and im bringing bacck like two of the things in this passage as future jokes in the movie>

[BROKEN Productions]

YES thats an awsome comedy i wouldnt have thought of this

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

ok HELP WE DONT HAVE A TITLE
we cant think of a name for the underground organization and we dont want somthing like cartfest or carts of fury. HELP!

[Flamingo With A Spoon Productions]

STONER 3

If ya wanta get down ya betta... stick o'round...

STONER 1 and Stoner 2

...Cocaine... (mumbled)

JOE

ok... so anyway, what are you guys doing here?

STONER 2

We can't tell you.

ROB

If you tell us, I'll give you a lighter.

STONER 1

...Give us time to think this over.

The two stoners walk about 10 feet away to think about the offer. The third stays passed out.

STONER 1

I think we should do it.

STONER 2

No way, we can't, its against the code. They'll kill us if they find out we told them.

STONER 1

Think about it for a minute, we just lost two team mates against the Japanese, that retard over there may need to go to the hospital.


By now the stoner lying down is screaming a song which he and Michael are singing a duet to.

STONER 3 and Michael

Babe, i got you babe...

STONER 1

Scratch that we have to take him to the hospital now. No matter how baked you get, you NEVER sing Sher.

STONER 2

So we tell them, but what happens to us?

STONER 1

We tell them, give them the cart and we'll drop out. Besides we need a new lighter.

<please keep in mind that im trying to give u something good with out giving up much, so this is earlier on into the script

and im bringing bacck like two of the things in this passage as future jokes in the movie>

It's OK. I'm sure with some rescripting it could work pretty well.

[michaelbak]

ok someone give me their opinion (please keep an open mind) on a short (roughly 30 min) film about a series of illegal underground shoppingcart races. itll be basically about a group of people who stumble upon this and attempt to become a part of it but face a bunch of challenges (involving canadians, strippers, etc.) to become the worlds best shopping cart racing team. their mortal enemies are the icelandian(ic) because i really don't know anyone from iceland and its iceland. theyre also on the run from the cops. glmclaim, i know you will say this sucks. i just know. so im ignoring you. any one else though feel free to post an opinion. please :D

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[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

It's OK. I'm sure with some rescripting it could work pretty well.

i think you need to read the part where i said im trying to not give away too much because we want to do castign after we have finished the entire script:nonono:

[Flamingo With A Spoon Productions]

And I think you need to read the bit where I said with some rescripting as in agreeing with what you mentioned earlier. :justin:

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

...touché

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

today we almost got into alot of trouble for stealing a shopping cart from giant

[BROKEN Productions]

have like a fake bottle of nitros on the bottom of the cart like a paint ball CO2 bottle and scratch out the brand name and write N2O in bad lettering make it look funny

[FyceDesigns]

This actually sounds pretty good. You should make a few Speed Racer jokes, like maybe show a monkey in the little baby seat of a cart. Anyways, good luck!

[KMProductions]

haha this sounds really funny.

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

OK BIG ISSUE

WHERE THE HELL CAN I FIND A SHOPPING CART
we're so SOL
we found a bunch near a dumnpster and went to take them but some guy on a motor bike came by and said those were property of Giant and that just cuz there in the thrash doesnt mean theyre thrash so I NEED TO FIND A WAY TO GET CARTS

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

yo, we should just use the pick up truck and go to costco


if you like we can wear black hoodies and ski hats

[HunnyBunchFilms]

Maybe you can borrow them.

[yourmindsinnerworkings]

i only wish. damn grocery store owners wont let us chop the legs off of one. we need to build a rig outta one

[clabb]

go to a grocery store witha pocket full of quarters, then put the quarters in the carts coin slot so it unlocks them from the rest, and there you go you just bought yourself some wicked cheap carts.

and when your done take the carts back and you get a full refund :thumbsup:

(and if an employee gives you shit then just tell them that you paid for the carts ( then run away with them REALLY fast))

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

cart coin slot? what the hell kind of grocery store do you go to?

[Withoutahelmet]

Sounds funny,
I'd watch it 9 times

[b-smitty323]

This sounds like something Will Ferrell would make. Do you have an idea for the title yet?

[...thinkaboutwhatyoujustsaid]

we have no idea what it will be called yet